Help with my reseach project?
I'm doing a research project on an anesthesiologist. This is what I have so far.
Nguyen 1
Imagine that it is three o’clock in the morning. You get a call that a young boy, just a little over five, got into a car accident and needs sudden surgery or it could likely mean death. You’re very tired, and you need rest, but it’s your job that you give the boy a dose of anesthesia. If you give him an overdose because of your sleepiness you could risk killing the boy. If you didn’t give him enough, then he’d wake up in the middle of the surgery. But if you do give him enough, you’d have a sense of satisfaction knowing that he’d possibly go through the surgery without problems. Problems caused by you of course; you’d never know about the surgeon. This person is called an anesthesiologist.
Job Description
An anesthesiologist is a person who uses anesthesia to put people to sleep before they enter surgery (Know You Anesthesiologist 1). Before the patient starts the operation they meet with the anesthesiologist. Thus he or she can see what the patient needs, and if they have any allergies to the anesthesia or any type of medicine that the anesthesiologist would use (1). The anesthesiologist is also responsible for the patients comfort, before, during, and after the surgery (2). An anesthesiologist has a lot of responsibilities that could either fall into the Pros or Cons category. This would go into the Cons category for me. With the surgeon, the anesthesiologist will decide the best type of anesthesia for the patient to take during the surgery (2). An anesthesiologist also works outside of the operating room. He or she may work may also work in Intensive Care Units, the Delivery (child birth) room, and sometimes in pain management (2). 
Nguyen 2
During the operation itself, the anesthesiologist usually sits through the entire operation analyzing the patient’s heart rate, blood pressure, heart rhythm, body temperature, and breathing (2). The anesthesiologist needs to constantly regulate the anesthesia (Know Your Anesthesiologist 3). This seems somewhat like hassle since they’re technically doing nearly nothing for several hours. If the patient suffers from diabetes, asthma, high blood pressure, arthritis, and/ or heart problems, the anesthesiologist will have to make a treatment for the patient.
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If you'd please tell me if I made any mistakes with commas and stuff please tell me!
I need a good grade in english!
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Nguyen 1
Imagine that it is three o’clock in the morning. You receive a frantic phone call from the hospital that a young boy --just a little over five-- was involved in a car accident and needs immediate surgery or he will likely die. You’re very tired, and you need rest, but it’s your job to give the boy a proper dose of anesthesia. If you give him too much because of your fatigue, you could risk killing the boy. If you supply him with an adequate amount of anesthesia, then he’ll wake up in the middle of the surgery. But if you do give him enough, you’ll have a sense of satisfaction knowing that he’ll probably go through the surgery without problems. That is, problems caused by you, of course; you never know about the surgeon. And who is this person, this facilitator of all major medical proceedings? This person is called an anesthesiologist.
Job Description
An anesthesiologist is a person who uses a controlled dose of drugs to ease people into a state of unconsciousness before they enter surgery (Know You Anesthesiologist 1). Before the patient is operated on they meet with the anesthesiologist. During this meeting, he or she can see what the patient needs, and if they have any allergies to the anesthesia or any type of medicine that the anesthesiologist would use (1). The anesthesiologist is also responsible for the patient's comfort before, during, and after the surgery (2). An anesthesiologist has a lot of responsibilities that could either fall into the pros or cons category. For me, this would go into the Cons category. Alongside the surgeon, the anesthesiologist will decide the best type of anesthesia for the patient to receive during the surgery (2). An anesthesiologist also works outside of the operating room. He or she may work may also work in an Intensive Care Unit, the Delivery (child birth) room, and sometimes in pain management (2).
Nguyen 2
During the operation itself, the anesthesiologist usually observes and analyzes the patient’s heart rate, blood pressure, heart rhythm, body temperature, and breathing (2). The anesthesiologist needs to constantly regulate the amount of anesthesia the patient receives and it's effects on their body at all times. (Know Your Anesthesiologist 3). This seems like somewhat like hassle since they’re technically doing nearly nothing for several hours. Also, If the patient suffers from diabetes, asthma, high blood pressure, arthritis, and/ or heart problems, the anesthesiologist must provide the safeguards necessary to ensure the patient's continuous health and safety.
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Your paper itself was good, and you had no problems with commas or anything, but it sounded kind of redundant to me at times, and I felt I could maybe spruce it up. I hope you don't mind :]
I hope this helps, and good luck on the rest of your paper!
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I write a lot of papers.
the first part about the young boy isnt intrestin
